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breaking · 07-08-2004, 10:47 PM

Your style is a unique one indeed. I get what you are trying to say and stuff... When I wrote I use to rhyme in AABB format.. Then I moved on to ABAB format.. Then I played around with ABBA format.. Then I started writing in a non-rhyming way. I found that I liked ABBA and not rhyming at all the best methods for me. Since you told us you just picked up poetry, or something, then you should experiment with all types of it. Find out what works best for you, and stick to it. It's always good to try new things, you may be surprised.

In regards to your work, I like it. On your first post you could do a little better like Bokuho put it right on the money. I in no way "hate" them.. Just write more so I can see

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whisper_to_me · 07-09-2004, 12:21 PM

ok I get what you are saying amanda. I will start experimenting with different formats and see what works for me. thanks a bunch for the advice. I know i'm not a very good writer but i'm working on it. that's why i posted this thread. to get criticism and become better. and from you and bokuho that's exactly what i am getting. so thanks.

dark.illuminate · 08-26-2005, 09:30 PM

yeah, i stumbled a bit over your first, but i LOVED "Falling". Keep up the awesomeness!

whisper_to_me · 08-27-2005, 11:32 AM

thanks mokona! yea my first one doesnt seem to please anyone. but im glad you liked falling. its about a past relationship. so thanks again for your comment

Libby_is_me · 11-17-2005, 04:18 AM

'Misfit'
What a great poem. Its so real and that's how I feel a lot of the time. The whole feeling liek a stone phrase is really powerful. Thats how I feel sometimes, juts numb to the sadness. Oh well, at the moment I'm happy. Hope you are too!

whisper_to_me · 11-18-2005, 06:12 PM

thanks libby_is_me, yea im happy now lol thanks yea i think we all feel like that sometimes

08-26-2005, 09:30 PM	#13 (permalink)
dark.illuminate n00blet Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Canada Age: 17 Posts: 11 Points: 0.00 Bank: 121.25 Total Points: 121.25 Donate	nice! yeah, i stumbled a bit over your first, but i LOVED "Falling". Keep up the awesomeness!

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07-08-2004, 10:47 PM	#11 (permalink)
breaking [A]nnoyed [F]reak™ Join Date: May 2004 Location: Behind You... Age: 19 Posts: 213 Points: 840.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 840.00 Donate	Your style is a unique one indeed. I get what you are trying to say and stuff... When I wrote I use to rhyme in AABB format.. Then I moved on to ABAB format.. Then I played around with ABBA format.. Then I started writing in a non-rhyming way. I found that I liked ABBA and not rhyming at all the best methods for me. Since you told us you just picked up poetry, or something, then you should experiment with all types of it. Find out what works best for you, and stick to it. It's always good to try new things, you may be surprised. In regards to your work, I like it. On your first post you could do a little better like Bokuho put it right on the money. I in no way "hate" them.. Just write more so I can see keeps eye on this thread

07-09-2004, 12:21 PM	#12 (permalink)
whisper_to_me Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: halfway to anywhere Age: 19 Posts: 502 Points: 1,894.50 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,894.50 Donate	ok I get what you are saying amanda. I will start experimenting with different formats and see what works for me. thanks a bunch for the advice. I know i'm not a very good writer but i'm working on it. that's why i posted this thread. to get criticism and become better. and from you and bokuho that's exactly what i am getting. so thanks.

08-27-2005, 11:32 AM	#14 (permalink)
whisper_to_me Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: halfway to anywhere Age: 19 Posts: 502 Points: 1,894.50 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,894.50 Donate	thanks mokona! yea my first one doesnt seem to please anyone. but im glad you liked falling. its about a past relationship. so thanks again for your comment

11-17-2005, 04:18 AM	#15 (permalink)
Libby_is_me Junior Member Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: I live in Australia "Down Under" Posts: 41 Points: 370.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 370.00 Donate	'Misfit' What a great poem. Its so real and that's how I feel a lot of the time. The whole feeling liek a stone phrase is really powerful. Thats how I feel sometimes, juts numb to the sadness. Oh well, at the moment I'm happy. Hope you are too!

11-18-2005, 06:12 PM	#16 (permalink)
whisper_to_me Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: halfway to anywhere Age: 19 Posts: 502 Points: 1,894.50 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,894.50 Donate	thanks libby_is_me, yea im happy now lol thanks yea i think we all feel like that sometimes

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