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~river~ · 04-10-2008, 07:25 PM

oh wow i feel so very flattered but no, no literature major for me, im a nursing student and english as a school subject wasnt my strong point but i hated the class and its structured learning

Dad2leia · 04-10-2008, 07:33 PM

Nursing, well, in that case, you could give your patients there daily medication in prose!

Good luck with that career choice. My mother-in-law got out of it about 10 years ago, give or take a couple, and she said that the work load was getting to be too much (meaning too many patients and not enough nursing staff to cover adequately). I do wish you well, because it is the nurses that make the doctors.

In the meantime, keep up your writing. I wish that I had, because now, it would give me one, a hobby, and two, some way of letting everything bottled up out. Now, I just bitch at everyone. Somehow, I don't think that that gets the point across as efficiently...

~river~ · 04-10-2008, 08:01 PM

as im sure medication in the form of poetry would really cure dementia

as for career choice its a job that will get me work when i travel and get my dr hubby (i have a shoe habit!)
and start writing again i stopped writing for 2 or something years and yes i write and i still bitch but as a 19 year old and female bitching is allowed and i love to bitch.

~river~ · 04-10-2008, 08:08 PM

sunlight memory
a half formed thought
the words
just out of my reach
just out of my life

summer shower
i let the rain fall
down on me
golden dreaming
the closest i've come
to heaven

let this rain fall down
melt away
the frost of time

memories just a sequence
a sequence lost
frozen in time
go back to that place
go back to that day

reminisce
the sunlit showers
image of a summer smile
golden dreaming

just out of my reach
always
out of my reach
shut my eyes
and im
close to heaven

memories
my golden dreaming

i thought i would put my submission in for the monthly evboard writers group. i am happy with it and this way people can give me some constructive criticism which would be good

~river~ · 04-13-2008, 06:09 PM

Yesterday's bride
broken
she ran away
tears stained white
salt flakes fall
like the first winter snow

this year the frost came early

nothing worth having
ever came easy
find a way out
can you pay the price?

her finger still feels
the cold
a metal ring
sign of a promise that
killed off her hope

this year the frost came early

nothing your given
is worth having
find the great escape
how much can you give before you recieve?

the thorns in her roses
another attack
red in scent and in colour
the fragrent hold on her
a little girls broken dreaming

Yesterday's bride she ran away
her hollow heart
left behind her

today the bride of tomorrow
wonders at this missing legacy
the cold ring an unbroken promise

the frost came early this year

bringing with it a season of change
yesterdays bride
she fell as the first winter snow
each flake one of loss one of hope

Sweet Tigger · 04-13-2008, 07:46 PM

Wow Shannon,
These are all absolutely lovely!!
Very deep, heartfelt, so much feeling, and emotion,
just very well writen all together!!!!

~river~ · 04-13-2008, 08:40 PM

Falling Stars

Can you promise me
This wound will heal?
I look into your eyes
And I see worlds end
Planets die
And I wonder why
I would believe
The lies you spin
The stars that fall
From the sky behind you
The shattered remnants
Of the day that was
The day that may be
Will I let those hopes fade
With the sun set
Hello to the moon
Under your sweet face
Peace and quite
For once I rest
Remove the pain
Of this wound
Poultice
Draw the poison out
Can you promise me
This would will heal?
Worlds will end and planets die
Before I trust the stars that fall

AdamantEsuna · 04-13-2008, 08:50 PM

Oooh, I really like Falling Stars, it's very dreamy, makes me a little sleepy

the word Poultice reminds me of Poultry tho

~river~ · 04-14-2008, 01:28 AM

this is something i started writing a while ago and only just found the main body and soul part had been playing around in my head for awhile and from that came 2 pieces slightly different
however here we go

I love this time of year
Autumn leaves falling softly
Gliding by
Like magnificent birds of prey
Come to carry mind away

Body and soul
I’m torn apart
Body and soul
I can’t make it right

Rip my insides out
Hollow choking feeling
Gasping
Like a wilting rose
Thorns come to cut me open
Petals fall away

Body and soul
I’m torn apart
Body and soul
I can’t make it through the night

Love profusion
Leaving logic behind
Kitten left behind in a box
Dazed and dashed
By the roadside

Body and soul
I’m torn apart
Body and soul
I can’t make it right
I can’t make it through this night

~river~ · 04-16-2008, 08:02 PM

I watch the storm clouds roll in
read the stories in the flashes
in this bright light my pulse quickens
I know it is time, to say goodbye
to dangerous to stay
I will get burnt

the settling rumble of the thunder
calms my shattered nerves
I know the worst is yet to come
but I would rather stay here
then hide away

I feel the power of the storm
give me strength
to face my fears
let the rain come
and mask these tears

clear blue skies I can see the stars
I will wait here for the next storm
for another fight
I'll learn the stories embeded in the light

04-10-2008, 07:25 PM	#41 (permalink)
~river~ I iz st00pid lyke whut? Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 1,617 Points: 558.40 Bank: 72,495.39 Total Points: 73,053.80 Donate	oh wow i feel so very flattered but no, no literature major for me, im a nursing student and english as a school subject wasnt my strong point but i hated the class and its structured learning __________________ Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings, But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul. Sex and the City

04-10-2008, 08:01 PM	#43 (permalink)
~river~ I iz st00pid lyke whut? Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 1,617 Points: 558.40 Bank: 72,495.39 Total Points: 73,053.80 Donate	as im sure medication in the form of poetry would really cure dementia as for career choice its a job that will get me work when i travel and get my dr hubby (i have a shoe habit!) and start writing again i stopped writing for 2 or something years and yes i write and i still bitch but as a 19 year old and female bitching is allowed and i love to bitch. __________________ Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings, But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul. Sex and the City

04-10-2008, 08:08 PM	#44 (permalink)
~river~ I iz st00pid lyke whut? Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 1,617 Points: 558.40 Bank: 72,495.39 Total Points: 73,053.80 Donate	summer smile sunlight memory a half formed thought the words just out of my reach just out of my life summer shower i let the rain fall down on me golden dreaming the closest i've come to heaven let this rain fall down melt away the frost of time memories just a sequence a sequence lost frozen in time go back to that place go back to that day reminisce the sunlit showers image of a summer smile golden dreaming just out of my reach always out of my reach shut my eyes and im close to heaven memories my golden dreaming i thought i would put my submission in for the monthly evboard writers group. i am happy with it and this way people can give me some constructive criticism which would be good __________________ Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings, But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul. Sex and the City

04-13-2008, 06:09 PM	#45 (permalink)
~river~ I iz st00pid lyke whut? Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 1,617 Points: 558.40 Bank: 72,495.39 Total Points: 73,053.80 Donate	promise Yesterday's bride broken she ran away tears stained white salt flakes fall like the first winter snow this year the frost came early nothing worth having ever came easy find a way out can you pay the price? her finger still feels the cold a metal ring sign of a promise that killed off her hope this year the frost came early nothing your given is worth having find the great escape how much can you give before you recieve? the thorns in her roses another attack red in scent and in colour the fragrent hold on her a little girls broken dreaming Yesterday's bride she ran away her hollow heart left behind her today the bride of tomorrow wonders at this missing legacy the cold ring an unbroken promise the frost came early this year bringing with it a season of change yesterdays bride she fell as the first winter snow each flake one of loss one of hope __________________ Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings, But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul. Sex and the City

04-13-2008, 07:46 PM	#46 (permalink)
Sweet Tigger Miss Happy-Go-Lucky Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Over The Rainbow Age: 31 Posts: 1,905 Points: 10,679.56 Bank: 41,515.84 Total Points: 52,195.40 Donate	Wow Shannon, These are all absolutely lovely!! Very deep, heartfelt, so much feeling, and emotion, just very well writen all together!!!! __________________ Always Believe In Your Self!!!

04-10-2008, 07:33 PM	#42 (permalink)
Dad2leia Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Glenshaw, PA Age: 37 Posts: 169 Points: 10,749.54 Bank: 29,000.00 Total Points: 39,749.54 Donate	Nursing, well, in that case, you could give your patients there daily medication in prose! Good luck with that career choice. My mother-in-law got out of it about 10 years ago, give or take a couple, and she said that the work load was getting to be too much (meaning too many patients and not enough nursing staff to cover adequately). I do wish you well, because it is the nurses that make the doctors. In the meantime, keep up your writing. I wish that I had, because now, it would give me one, a hobby, and two, some way of letting everything bottled up out. Now, I just bitch at everyone. Somehow, I don't think that that gets the point across as efficiently...

04-13-2008, 08:40 PM	#47 (permalink)
~river~ I iz st00pid lyke whut? Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 1,617 Points: 558.40 Bank: 72,495.39 Total Points: 73,053.80 Donate	Falling Stars Can you promise me This wound will heal? I look into your eyes And I see worlds end Planets die And I wonder why I would believe The lies you spin The stars that fall From the sky behind you The shattered remnants Of the day that was The day that may be Will I let those hopes fade With the sun set Hello to the moon Under your sweet face Peace and quite For once I rest Remove the pain Of this wound Poultice Draw the poison out Can you promise me This would will heal? Worlds will end and planets die Before I trust the stars that fall __________________ Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings, But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul. Sex and the City

04-13-2008, 08:50 PM	#48 (permalink)
AdamantEsuna i am a BLACK BULLET Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: under your bed Age: 14 Posts: 155 Points: 2,253.79 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,253.79 Donate	Oooh, I really like Falling Stars, it's very dreamy, makes me a little sleepy the word Poultice reminds me of Poultry tho __________________ INSANITY IS THE FIRST SIGN OF INSANITY!!! Scream and make sure you keep it quiet~ Do you wanna be on what I feel?~

04-14-2008, 01:28 AM	#49 (permalink)
~river~ I iz st00pid lyke whut? Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 1,617 Points: 558.40 Bank: 72,495.39 Total Points: 73,053.80 Donate	this is something i started writing a while ago and only just found the main body and soul part had been playing around in my head for awhile and from that came 2 pieces slightly different however here we go I love this time of year Autumn leaves falling softly Gliding by Like magnificent birds of prey Come to carry mind away Body and soul I’m torn apart Body and soul I can’t make it right Rip my insides out Hollow choking feeling Gasping Like a wilting rose Thorns come to cut me open Petals fall away Body and soul I’m torn apart Body and soul I can’t make it through the night Love profusion Leaving logic behind Kitten left behind in a box Dazed and dashed By the roadside Body and soul I’m torn apart Body and soul I can’t make it right I can’t make it through this night __________________ Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings, But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul. Sex and the City

04-16-2008, 08:02 PM	#50 (permalink)
~river~ I iz st00pid lyke whut? Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 1,617 Points: 558.40 Bank: 72,495.39 Total Points: 73,053.80 Donate	stories in lights I watch the storm clouds roll in read the stories in the flashes in this bright light my pulse quickens I know it is time, to say goodbye to dangerous to stay I will get burnt the settling rumble of the thunder calms my shattered nerves I know the worst is yet to come but I would rather stay here then hide away I feel the power of the storm give me strength to face my fears let the rain come and mask these tears clear blue skies I can see the stars I will wait here for the next storm for another fight I'll learn the stories embeded in the light __________________ Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings, But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul. Sex and the City Last edited by ~river~ : 04-19-2008 at 06:51 PM.