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Old 07-18-2008, 02:23 AM   #81 (permalink)
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so i went a little crazy while i away and this seems much longer and much more rambly then my normal stuff but here you go

give me something to sing for
my voice will rise
in my call of praise
one happy memory
one blessed minute

hold me tight
and kiss my lips
i will want to stay here
captured by you in this moment
with you

beautiful tragedity falling
from grace
even a feather light heart
can not hover when
possessed by me

hold me close
let this game play out longer
kiss me harder
leave me breathless
take my air

prisioner of yours
just bring the shackles
captured by you
in this moment
i shall sing your song

this airless moment
i will break time
to stay bound at your side
singing a song of praise.

if i had a reason to sing
i would for you
raise my voice

look at the stars
my lightened heart
eclipsed beauty
captured in this
radiance
captured in this monet
hold me close
i will stay with you
kiss me deep do not
leave this game incomplete
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Old 07-18-2008, 09:50 PM   #82 (permalink)
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so i could not sleep last night and as a result went crazy with way to many thoughts crowding my head for attention. to get some focus and relief from it i ended up writing using my phone and saved drafts to get my head a little clearier XD


The static of my deadened heart
In my empty walking life
I am awaiting clarity
To lift this heavy stupor
Release my dulled sense
Allowing a chance
For this soul to ignite
To let the world burn
Just the faintest taste of smoke
On my horizon is enough
To stir the beast within

I cannot understand why
I do not surrender
For this life of static
And white noise
Is not where I belong
I cannot rest
I cannot sleep
I pray for deliverance
I am broken
I am begging
On my knees

Clarity release me
All I ask for
Is one spark
Take this soul as payment
Let my dulled world ignite
Deliverance
Release me
Just take hold of my hand
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Old 07-18-2008, 10:02 PM   #83 (permalink)
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so i could not sleep last night and as a result went crazy with way to many thoughts crowding my head for attention. to get some focus and relief from it i ended up writing using my phone and saved drafts to get my head a little clearier XD


The static of my deadened heart
In my empty walking life
I am awaiting clarity
To lift this heavy stupor
Release my dulled sense
Allowing a chance
For this soul to ignite
To let the world burn
Just the faintest taste of smoke
On my horizon is enough
To stir the beast within

I cannot understand why
I do not surrender
For this life of static
And white noise
Is not where I belong
I cannot rest
I cannot sleep
I pray for deliverance
I am broken
I am begging
On my knees

Clarity release me
All I ask for
Is one spark
Take this soul as payment
Let my dulled world ignite
Deliverance
Release me

Just take hold of my hand

I can't even pick a part to deem my favorite. Because I like the entire piece. You write beautifully.

But if I had to choose, I would say this part:
Quote:
For this life of static
And white noise
Is not where I belong
Wow. If you only knew the many different ways that I can identify with those words.

Amazing.
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Old 07-18-2008, 10:13 PM   #84 (permalink)
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and i did say i went crazy so here is the second i have a third i am yet to complete

Ever-present

I hold on to a small flame of hope
That this dark loveless night
I exist in will one day
Be lit by a thousand glowing stars
All burning bright
I hold on to the unrealistic dream
That you could love me
That my shrivelled untouched soul
Could be beautiful to someone
That I would be beautiful to anyone
I feel so bruised
The flame I carry flickers
At each gust of winter wind that blows
Around my shadowed fame
Does my insignificant soul
My tiny hopeless flame
Call to you?
As I walk alone I wonder
Will my dark night sky be ever present?
Omnipresent?
Will no stars ever shine?
Am I destined to remain unloved?
Alone?
I ask the empty night sky
When.
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Old 07-18-2008, 10:19 PM   #85 (permalink)
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*wipes away a tear*

Those words echo through my heart. It's a feeling it knows all too well.

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That you could love me
That my shrivelled untouched soul
Could be beautiful to someone
That I would be beautiful to anyone
I feel so bruised
This reminds me of giving your everything, but everything never being enough to be noticed. Especially the way you desire to be noticed.

Just my take. But it brought tears to my eyes. <3
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Old 07-19-2008, 11:28 PM   #86 (permalink)
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ocean of the imagination

The ocean in my eyes
Carries my sense of imagination
Far out and far away
Each time a waves crashes into the shore
A new sensation of foreboding
Rips this transitory body to pieces
Breaking me against
Jagged rocks reflections only
Of this transient life in pain

A calmer sea does not exist in my mind
My eyes are constantly torn
From one torment to another
The tides rise and fall in motion
With emotions
So angry so out of control
A storm will brew
Taking control of this momentary
Distraction in this bewildering existence

No sailor can safely navigate
The hidden rips and devastating swells
Each swell and ripple
Gasping breathless
Drowning in unfelt sensations
I cannot save myself
When the cause is tied within
I control the tides the rise and fall
Of a foreboding sea
Transitory sensations float
Lost in the waves
Navigate these devastating waters
Maybe then imagination can return


i feel kind of bad my depressed writing has now made 2 people tear up.
music box A+ for you. you disected pretty damn well
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Old 07-20-2008, 12:02 AM   #87 (permalink)
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i feel kind of bad my depressed writing has now made 2 people tear up.
music box A+ for you. you disected pretty damn well
It wasn't bad tears. I cry when I'm overwhelmed, no matter what emotion. But your writing over whelmed me and made me feel things that I haven't felt in a while. It wasn't a bad thing.

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My favorite part. <3 Especially
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I control the tides the rise and fall
Of a foreboding sea
I don't know why. But it stuck out to me. Keep writing and posting please.
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Old 07-20-2008, 08:21 PM   #88 (permalink)
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You are amazingly talented. Wow - your words flow like a melody; i can imagine music tracks in my head to what you write. Keep writing, your stuff is very very potent and original.
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